can we blame the distance

you and I,
we are driving
the whole way to Pasadena.

white lines
waver in the heat –
parallel reflections
in hindsight
converging
just behind horizon’s edge.

I wonder,
can the travels
bend our paths
back together

or
have we past-
through that intersection
well before starting
our trip to Pasadena.

Inspired by thoughtsย  http://raysharp.wordpress.com/2012/11/28/parallel-postulate-oranges/

21 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. billgncs
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 02:34:58

    delightful images of a relationship wavering in the heat of motion.

    Reply

  2. Paresh
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 02:38:14

    Exquisite…somehow you have managed to weave a sense of loss, a glimmer of hope, the uncertainty of future and the longing of love…all together in a heartfelt verse….wow ๐Ÿ™‚

    Reply

  3. warmginger
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 04:54:16

    Paresh said it all.
    I love the idea of actually heading for Pasadena – of course it’s a real place, but for me it’s a mythical name from the movies.

    Reply

  4. soumyav
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 05:07:21

    beautiful journey of a bond depicted thru words

    Reply

  5. simonhlilly
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 09:06:51

    Cinematic!

    Reply

  6. m lewis redford
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 11:37:26

    moving …!

    … I could be wrong (I usually am) but should that last stanza read:

    ‘or
    have we passed …’

    I realise I’m probably stepping on metaphor-shells here in which case please forgive me

    Reply

  7. agjorgenson
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 13:53:08

    I love the phrase “can our travels bend our paths”. It makes rich use of the possibility of journey. Thanks for this.

    Reply

  8. orpheusword
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 17:35:16

    Loved every word!

    Reply

  9. Cranux
    Nov 29, 2012 @ 21:09:39

    I noticed “past” as well, but liked the way that it fits as the last word of that thought, but read aloud flows into the next as passed.

    Reply

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