journey to love

And another challenge…nothing like a dare to get the blood boiling and (writing) juices flowing! This one comes from a Panda…and is as follows:

The challenge is to write a poem about a journey through (using?) the human body as metaphor.

You must mention at least the bum or colon, stomach, chest, heart and head – and other bits if you like ;) It can’t just be a description of the bits, but otherwise, make free!

So … here goes…

Love at first sight,
I’ve always been told,
is how it happens:
eyes paving the path
from head to heart.

But your words,
clever phrases,
layers of meaning
stop the breath
in my chest – aching
at their beauty,
stomach
twisting with desire.

Just a book
sans cover, blinded eyes
leading heart-
missives forging
tentative promises,
our journey begins.

THIS WAS HARD … bad Panda. And I agree – I don’t like it. And … I used but instead of arse or colon. 🙂

 

13 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. ruleofstupid
    Dec 30, 2012 @ 17:55:40

    I love the eyes paving the path… don’t be mean to you! There’s good stuff here mimsy 🙂
    I’ll try not to be so demanding next time!
    You deserve a special prize for being the only one to dare 😀

    Reply

  2. Bruce Ruston
    Dec 30, 2012 @ 20:17:00

    nice use of the challange

    Reply

  3. unfetteredbs
    Dec 30, 2012 @ 20:31:35

    oh you did wonderfully! God you all are so good.

    Reply

  4. Susan L Daniels
    Dec 30, 2012 @ 20:40:39

    I feel like we are entering the literary equivalent of those cooking shows I am addicted to, like “Chopped” or “The Next Iron Chef.” Keep those creative pots simmering, peeps.

    Reply

  5. Susan L Daniels
    Dec 30, 2012 @ 20:41:01

    And I loved what you did here, WM. Just beautiful.

    Reply

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  7. ramblingsfromamum
    Dec 31, 2012 @ 09:58:18

    As I said I’m backing away from this one.. yes I’m chicken. Well done though Mims. 🙂

    Reply

  8. Miriam E.
    Dec 31, 2012 @ 23:43:22

    i love how you manage to create something so delicate and beautiful. wonderful work.

    Reply

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