waking

dawn is still sleeping –
the world tucked away
beyond the outermost reaches
of reality’s fingertips

with last vestiges of dreams
lingering on your lips
you turn to me,
body paralleling mine,
two concentric curves,
lovers traveling together
in the same direction

your warm breath on my neck
bridges night’s barriers
pulling me across
the lonely twilight hours
into the morning sun

18 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Stephen Kellogg
    Mar 19, 2013 @ 02:51:21

    Mims,
    This is fantastic!
    I struggle to pull out lines I really like as it’s hard to narrow down…
    but
    I really enjoyed
    “the world tucked away
    beyond the outermost reaches
    of reality’s fingertips”
    and
    “with last vestiges of dreams
    lingering on your lips”
    AND
    “pulling me across
    the lonely twilight hours
    into the morning sun.”

    told you it was hard to choose… dare I attempt a “response poem.”
    Hmmm

    I like this one… Did I say I liked this one yet? I like this one πŸ˜€

    Peace,

    Stephen

    Reply

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  3. Stephen Kellogg
    Mar 19, 2013 @ 03:36:04

    Obviously I couldn’t resist… Maybe one day soon I’ll write one that you can write a response to… πŸ˜€

    Peace,

    Stephen

    Reply

  4. djderdiger
    Mar 19, 2013 @ 07:10:36

    Beautifully written; i love the idea of lovers travelling in parallel dimensions while they dream: the dueling spirals of the double helix comes to mind…

    Reply

  5. Chas Spain
    Mar 19, 2013 @ 12:53:16

    beautifully written

    Reply

  6. deanabo
    Mar 19, 2013 @ 15:36:10

    This is really good!

    Reply

  7. Alice Keys
    Mar 19, 2013 @ 19:50:55

    I love this dreamy, romantic piece. I read it after SK’s response poem. Both poems are lovely together or apart. Alice

    Reply

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