dawn is still sleeping –
the world tucked away
beyond the outermost reaches
of reality’s fingertips
with last vestiges of dreams
lingering on your lips
you turn to me,
body paralleling mine,
two concentric curves,
lovers traveling together
in the same direction
your warm breath on my neck
bridges night’s barriers
pulling me across
the lonely twilight hours
into the morning sun
whimsy~mimsy 
Mar 19, 2013 @ 02:51:21
Mims,
This is fantastic!
I struggle to pull out lines I really like as it’s hard to narrow down…
but
I really enjoyed
“the world tucked away
beyond the outermost reaches
of reality’s fingertips”
and
“with last vestiges of dreams
lingering on your lips”
AND
“pulling me across
the lonely twilight hours
into the morning sun.”
told you it was hard to choose… dare I attempt a “response poem.”
Hmmm
I like this one… Did I say I liked this one yet? I like this one 😀
Peace,
Stephen
Mar 19, 2013 @ 03:57:23
🙂 thank you! I think you really liked it. 😉
sweet dreams!
Mims
Mar 19, 2013 @ 04:00:05
Must get more sleep than last night… headed to bed.
Sleep well,
G’nite
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:08:59
🙂 hope you slept well!
Mar 19, 2013 @ 03:36:04
Obviously I couldn’t resist… Maybe one day soon I’ll write one that you can write a response to… 😀
Peace,
Stephen
Mar 19, 2013 @ 03:56:43
🙂 I’m certain as soon as I settle down and read, I’ll be right on that!
Mar 19, 2013 @ 07:10:36
Beautifully written; i love the idea of lovers travelling in parallel dimensions while they dream: the dueling spirals of the double helix comes to mind…
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:08:20
Ooohh dueling double helix – I love that thought!
Thank you!
Mar 19, 2013 @ 12:53:16
beautifully written
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:07:34
Thank you!
Mar 19, 2013 @ 15:36:10
This is really good!
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:07:24
Thank you!
Mar 19, 2013 @ 19:50:55
I love this dreamy, romantic piece. I read it after SK’s response poem. Both poems are lovely together or apart. Alice
Mar 19, 2013 @ 19:55:26
Thank you! I thought they spoke nicely to each other. 🙂
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:12:18
They do speak nicely to each other. And to this passing reader. Sigh.
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:12:56
(“Sigh” in a romantic way.)
Mar 19, 2013 @ 20:15:04
Oh of course! I wouldn’t have taken it any other way!