a few words spewing from my soul…
26 Mar 2013 18 Comments
by Whimsy Mimsy in poetry Tags: deer, snow, spring, trees
snow mantled pine trees shake off winter’s heavy coat startled, three deer bolt
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sustainabilitea Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:00:16
I want be doing spring haiku!!! 🙂
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Whimsy Mimsy Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:18:14
Nooo kidding!!!
AshiAkira Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:30:08
Good imagery. Beautiful haiku.
Eric Mar 26, 2013 @ 12:27:42
the three amig-does
white shrouds make pines wilt throwing down flaked thunderbolts three amig-does fly
😉
Whimsy Mimsy Mar 26, 2013 @ 16:06:04
🙂
Ray Sharp Mar 26, 2013 @ 13:50:37
miss mims, this is a real haiku! you see so few traditional haikus these days with the sense of the way they were done in japan. this is evocative of the changing season, snow falling from the pine bough impels the deer to motion. perfect.
Whimsy Mimsy Mar 26, 2013 @ 15:50:41
Thanks! I almost hit the deer on my way to work. That would have made more a non traditional haiku haha
Ray Sharp Mar 26, 2013 @ 17:16:01
a flash of white tail the squeal of anti-lock brakes means venison stew
johnnycrabcakes Mar 26, 2013 @ 14:37:12
…startled, because they thought the last winter haiku had already come and gone…
Whimsy Mimsy Mar 26, 2013 @ 15:49:11
:))
Alice Keys Mar 26, 2013 @ 16:39:04
WM I like the delicate nature and the surprised deer. A nice aha in the last line that make it. Alice
slpmartin Mar 26, 2013 @ 21:22:22
Beautiful imagery!
Whimsy Mimsy Mar 26, 2013 @ 23:12:46
Thank you!!
I HAVE A VOICE Mar 27, 2013 @ 00:27:18
a collective scene and scenario ~ye a good good poet!
presenceinpoetry Mar 27, 2013 @ 02:58:27
Nice Haiku, this one really creates an image…and even has action. It’s hard in my mind to get a Haiku to have “action”.
Whimsy Mimsy Mar 27, 2013 @ 03:07:16
Thank you!
Anonymous Apr 05, 2013 @ 23:43:00
A pure haiku, so hard to get right. Really well done.
Whimsy Mimsy Apr 07, 2013 @ 21:07:57
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Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:00:16
I want be doing spring haiku!!! 🙂
Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:18:14
Nooo kidding!!!
Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:30:08
Good imagery. Beautiful haiku.
Mar 26, 2013 @ 12:27:42
the three amig-does
white shrouds make pines wilt
throwing down flaked thunderbolts
three amig-does fly
😉
Mar 26, 2013 @ 16:06:04
🙂
Mar 26, 2013 @ 13:50:37
miss mims, this is a real haiku! you see so few traditional haikus these days with the sense of the way they were done in japan. this is evocative of the changing season, snow falling from the pine bough impels the deer to motion. perfect.
Mar 26, 2013 @ 15:50:41
Thanks! I almost hit the deer on my way to work. That would have made more a non traditional haiku haha
Mar 26, 2013 @ 17:16:01
a flash of white tail
the squeal of anti-lock brakes
means venison stew
Mar 26, 2013 @ 14:37:12
…startled, because they thought the last winter haiku had already come and gone…
Mar 26, 2013 @ 15:49:11
:))
Mar 26, 2013 @ 16:39:04
WM I like the delicate nature and the surprised deer. A nice aha in the last line that make it. Alice
Mar 26, 2013 @ 21:22:22
Beautiful imagery!
Mar 26, 2013 @ 23:12:46
Thank you!!
Mar 27, 2013 @ 00:27:18
a collective scene and scenario ~ye a good good poet!
Mar 27, 2013 @ 02:58:27
Nice Haiku, this one really creates an image…and even has action. It’s hard in my mind to get a Haiku to have “action”.
Mar 27, 2013 @ 03:07:16
Thank you!
Apr 05, 2013 @ 23:43:00
A pure haiku, so hard to get right. Really well done.
Apr 07, 2013 @ 21:07:57
Thank you!