Haiku

snow mantled pine trees
shake off winter’s heavy coat
startled, three deer bolt

18 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. sustainabilitea
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:00:16

    I want be doing spring haiku!!! 🙂

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  2. AshiAkira
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 11:30:08

    Good imagery. Beautiful haiku.

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  3. Eric
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 12:27:42

    the three amig-does

    white shrouds make pines wilt
    throwing down flaked thunderbolts
    three amig-does fly

    😉

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  4. Ray Sharp
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 13:50:37

    miss mims, this is a real haiku! you see so few traditional haikus these days with the sense of the way they were done in japan. this is evocative of the changing season, snow falling from the pine bough impels the deer to motion. perfect.

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  5. johnnycrabcakes
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 14:37:12

    …startled, because they thought the last winter haiku had already come and gone…

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  6. Alice Keys
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 16:39:04

    WM I like the delicate nature and the surprised deer. A nice aha in the last line that make it. Alice

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  7. slpmartin
    Mar 26, 2013 @ 21:22:22

    Beautiful imagery!

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  8. I HAVE A VOICE
    Mar 27, 2013 @ 00:27:18

    a collective scene and scenario ~ye a good good poet!

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  9. presenceinpoetry
    Mar 27, 2013 @ 02:58:27

    Nice Haiku, this one really creates an image…and even has action. It’s hard in my mind to get a Haiku to have “action”.

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  10. Anonymous
    Apr 05, 2013 @ 23:43:00

    A pure haiku, so hard to get right. Really well done.

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