it’s early
the sky barely greying
into Monday’s dawn

I watch you sleeping
dark lashes splayed on faded circles
painted beneath your eyes
by the dreams you won’t speak of
that you wrestle every night

7 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. sustainabilitea
    Jun 11, 2013 @ 10:55:06

    Hope you don’t mind me mentioning that you need “it’s” rather than “it’s”. 🙂



  2. slpmartin
    Jun 11, 2013 @ 13:51:09

    A very strong image created in so few lines…well said IMHO.


  3. simonhlilly
    Jun 11, 2013 @ 19:13:43

    Like a lot. (but not ‘vestiges’ – nasty sound and a little plonky purple in the style of the rest of the language here, and anyway is not ‘vestiges’ synonym for ‘remains’? In which case it messes with the logic. In fact, miss out the line completely, maybe….)


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